The PERFECT applicant; what you should look like if you want to get in anywhere.

As most of you know, users on College Confidential often times engage in Results pages for the colleges they applied to where they post their stats and whether they were accepted, waitlisted, or rejected. Here is a sample profile of what yours should look like if you want to get into all of your dream colleges. Notice how, including the jokes, this applicant is able to spread himself wide yet be just as deep. He is a jack of all trades, master of all.

Decision: Accepted Everywhere

Objective:

• SAT I (breakdown): 2400 (…first try of course)
• ACT: 36
• SAT II: 800 Math II, 800 Biology, 800 Chemistry, 790 Physics, 800 Literature, 800 World History, 800 French w/ List, 800 Japanese w/ List.
• Unweighted GPA (out of 4.0): 4.0
• Rank (percentile if rank is unavailable): 1/666
• AP (place score in parenthesis): 5s on 12/12 tests
• IB (place score in parenthesis): NA
• Senior Year Course Load: AP Macro/Micro, 2D Art, Orchestra, Environmental Science, Intro to Biomedical Engineering (at local college), AP Computer Science, Cooking, Film Studies (had no difficult classes left by senior year…oops!)
• Major Awards (USAMO, Intel etc.): USAMO finalist, Intel National First Place winner, Siemens National First Place winner, World Piano Competition Level 12 winner, National High School Cheerleading Championships winner.

Subjective:

• Extracurriculars (place leadership in
  parenthesis): Basketball (team captain), Golf (team MVP), Cheerleading (team captain), High School Musical / Drama Club (pretty much Troy Bolton), Dance Marathon (choreographer), HELP-Helping Elderly Learn Polish (service group leader), TEACH-Teaching Elderly And Children Hopscotch (founder and CEO), Aeolian Harp player (10 years + soloist), Organist (horror movie soundtrack recorder)
• Job/Work Experience: bookstore merchant, student journalist for Puffington Host, internship at The Onion, lifeguard, McDonald’s hashbrown fryer.
• Volunteer/Community service: teaching elderly how to do various things (as noted above), petting dogs at the pound, 400+ hours volunteering at local hospital, school service organizations, putting on musicals for homeless people.
• Summer Activities: Noodling, storm chasing, counting down to Shark Week, inventing a kitchen utensil, creating Android apps, helping the elderly play bridge at local hospital.
• Essays: About my trip to Namibia where I met an Egyptian who showed me a rare chemical derivative from the yew tree that could potentially cure cancer, which I eventually wrote a book about that became an international best-seller. And how this changed my life and way I look at the world.
• Teacher Recommendation: Absolutely astounding! Read them all.
• Counselor Rec: Talked about my charm and good looks and how it affects my extreme affability.
• Additional Rec: From Obama.
• Interview: Took her for some afternoon tea.
• Supplementary Material(if any): My published best-seller, a soundtrack of my organ playing, a video of my harp solos, my research project abstract on curing cancer with paclitaxel, another rec letter from Hilary Clinton.

Other

• State (if domestic applicant): New York
• Country (if international applicant): US
• School Type: Private
• Ethnicity: Hispanic
• Gender: Male
• Income Bracket: Millions +
• Hooks (URM, first generation college, etc.): see above

Reflection

• Strengths: My application.
• Weaknesses: My lack of weaknesses.
• Why you think you were accepted/waitlisted/rejected: probably luck.
• Where else were you accepted/waitlisted/rejected: Accepted: you name it.

General Comments: It’s a blessing to have been so fortunate to have been accepted by the entire Ivy League and more! Whichever college’s campus I grace in the coming year will be as lucky to have me as I it. Oh the joy!

Writing not what matters most to you, but to the admissions officers.

Eyes locked on the computer monitor with its white light illuminating my face, I typed. It only seems like yesterday I struggled thus, pushing myself to write something of substance deeper than a kiddie pool. As always, after going through the process, I can now impart advice — advice, which upon hearing back then, I would not have heeded due to my own immature and proud stubbornness. But I urge you to at least consider what a one-year veteran has to say about the essay, one of the most important faces of your application. I’m conflicted about whether I should write this in list or essay form but given the subject matter I’ll proceed appropriately with essay form.

I’ll start by stressing the importance of writing a stellar essay by attempting to scare you. These people (the admissions officers) don’t know a thing about you. However, they do care about you — if you’re good enough. Let me ask, when you meet people, how do you get to know them? Through their voice and what they say, for the most part, right? Your essay (I’ll be referring to your Common App essay from here on out, but supplements apply as well) is the one vehicle through which you can actively communicate with the people that hold the keys to your future. If you write a subpar or even barely average essay, I guarantee you that perfect scores will not suffice. With  commendable achievements and great extracurriculars you might have a better chance to salvage a weak essay. But why not work hard on it now and not have to worry like I did whether everything else will make up for your essay? It makes you feel like you’re trying to justify your lack of effort in writing with your resume. Don’t be that person.

When choosing a subject matter you should be cautious but only within contentious topics. Don’t write about how your suspicious Egyptian neighbors turned out to be your best friends or how your addiction to heroine allowed you to start a life long journey of climbing out of a hole. No matter the gain, the initial loss will set you below every other applicant that never had that problem to begin with. Don’t try to make the readers feel sorry for you. Don’t try to make the readers feel like you’re sorry for them. Instead, write about something that you think might be too unique, but has an important impact on you. Taking intelligent risks have low chances of backfire, despite the definition of risk.

So what exactly do you write about? Think. If I, given an infinite amount of time, could eventually tell you the answer to that question, then you shouldn’t write about it. This is your chance to write about something no one has written before. Thinking up something like this takes time. So THINK. Write multiple drafts, ask successful upperclassmen, read your journals you thought you would never read, I don’t know but find something that somehow changed the way you think or how you see the world. There is no stronger theme to have permeating your narrative and analysis than this. Evolution of mind within even the most banal topics is and always will be more appealing than static cognition within the greatest of feats. So, show who what when where why how you learned something regarding the way you perceive things. You’ll show maturity, critical thinking skills, and brain plasticity, which, is really more an involuntary thing, but whatever it matters.

Once you’ve thought about the context within which you are going to realize your overall message, start writing. Write, rewrite, and rewrite again. Once you’ve done that, rewrite it. Eventually, you’ll want to show it to other people and get feedback. I’ll stop here with the writing advice since any college prep book will cover that in greater detail. One book I found immensely helpful for writing, in general, was The Elements of Style (click title for Wiki page). It’s only ~100 pages and is so incredibly great for improving your writing.

My last piece of advice is timing. Do everything I said a couple months ahead of the application due date. Which, for Class of 2014, is now.  Once you think you’re satisfied with it, put it down and forget about it for a couple weeks. Pick it up again and I guarantee you it will suck. But it’s okay. Hundreds of the kids you’re competing against will have this feeling in January, which if you think about, is kind of too late. Revise it or start over with a new story. Keep doing this until you are 100% proud of your essay and you think that it is original, representative of you, and better than everyone else’s that would ever apply. This is what I want to stress the most. Spend as much time as you think you would need to write an outstanding essay, then do it again. After writing consistently for a while now, I know that revising is a time-consuming process, but proportionally rewarding. I know for a fact that essays are what tip certain students in to the college and other students, unfortunately, out, even if, technically they are the better peer. Remember, everyone is on level ground in the essay. It’s the Essay Hunger Games and you want every last cornucopia item imaginable, because you’re dealing with thousands of other applicants. Only a certain percentage come out. May the odds be ever in your favor.

Here is a list of other random pieces of advice I either just thought of or couldn’t fit into the above.

1. Inject humor only when absolutely necessary; your joke about push pins won’t do anything about your enlightenment. Puns, in moderation (<1), are acceptable (I think).
2. Don’t come off as a jerk.
3. Don’t go over the word limit (I mean, why would you even test this, I don’t get it).
4. Don’t talk about Amanda Bynes.
5. Don’t talk about Drake Bell.
6. Don’t quote High School Musical song lyrics.
7. Don’t acknowledge Nickelback’s existence in any way.
8. Don’t start with a quote unless it’s your own, which is stupid.
9. Don’t write secret messages in invisible ink because they scan everything with UV lights and Voldemort will come after you.
10. Don’t mention your love for Emma Watson. …Okay, maybe.
11. DO read and revise till you can’t no more.
12. Don’t use double negatives.

Thanks everyone for reading and I hope some of my advice helps as I know they would have helped me had I known them a year ago. Remember, write, revise, write, revise, and spend some good quality time with your essay. It will pay off.

Good luck and feel free to comment your own suggestions or questions!

More about Dimensions.

Neha,

So here’s the run down of my Dimensions weekend experience. My parents and I got to Hanover, NH about 24 hours before Dimensions was scheduled to start, which gave us time to explore the area, the campus, and the local eateries. On Thursday, the day Dimensions started, we had breakfast and looked around some more until the afternoon when we had to go sign in for the start of Dimensions.

The upperclassmen greeted us prospies with a huge packet of information, which for some reason included a sparse list of 7 very specific places we could fill up our water bottles (strange but funny), and other freebies. It took a little time getting into the swing of things but soon I found myself conversing with a group of strangers while my parents were off to go itinerize their weekend (all or most of the programs for the weekend were open to students and parents). I eventually met up with my host, whose room I was going to be sleeping in for the next two nights, and we made our way to his dorm so I could unload my baggage. I ended up staying in East Wheelock, which is a little bit farther from the Big Green than the other dorm clusters, which is the courtyard with the X roads that you see basically on every photo of Dartmouth.

The rest of the day proceeded with welcome shows, performances by the many a Capella, dance, and instrumental groups, and speeches from staff and upperclassmen. Every nook and cranny of our remaining time was filled with programs, symposiums, and activities, all anchored with the aim of getting us enamored with the college. During Friday and Saturday I found myself going to a pre-med symposium, sitting in on a class about music addiction, and enjoying barbeque on the Green. Other notable events included an Engineering exhibit (where you got a TON of free stuff, including a top that looks like Dom’s totem in Inception), Real Talk (an uncensored Q&A with upperclassmen; you should have heard some of the questions [the upperclassmens’ reaction]), and Creativity in Motion (a show). At nights, we were led on tours into the forests nearby and into frat dance parties, all of which were dry, of course. Saturday night was the big show (which I talked about in my last post), which really sealed the deal for many of us.

Friday and Saturday nights I probably got fewer than 6 hours of sleep; I found myself wandering back from a really late group tour and staying up talking with my newly-befriended in the commons area until 4 in the morning. Needless to say, it was an amazing time and the two missed weeks of school and subsequent C on the Monday bio test was made up for. It’s been almost four months since I was last on campus and I’m itching to go back and see everyone I met the first time again.

Christopher

Summer Reading: Getting back in shape, kinda

IU doesn’t have nearly as intense summer work as many other schools.  Our only summer reading per se was a two page pamphlet about Herman B. Wells, a former president of IU who is credited by Wikipedia with the “development of Indiana University into a world class institution of higher learning.”  We were told the reading would be discussed during our summer orientation program. It turned out that more than half of the kids in my group hadn’t done the reading, so the ensuing discussion was hardly thought provoking.

I actually think required readings such as yours, although tedious, are a good idea.  Students going to places like Dartmouth are coming from all corners of the globe and have varying academic backgrounds.  The summer reading gives everyone something in common to complain talk about.

Other than the reading, IU has had me take a few online courses and tests. About three hours of time went into each a financial literacy course and a drugs/alcohol/sexual health course.  I actually found the financial literacy modules really interesting and informative.  In contrast, the wellness course was quite boring in that it was just a slightly more provocative version of high school health class. I also had to take both a math and a world language placement test (I took Spanish) online before Orientation.  I found the math test quite challenging but persevered through.  I was disappointed that the score I received actually counted for nothing as we took our real (much, much easier) placement test during Orientation.  It makes sense that the real test was in-person as it eliminates the chance of cheating and equalizes conditions for everyone.  I don’t understand why we took the online version, though. I guess it helped me get back in shape mentally.